How easy is this for you to read?

nice, sounds a little cheesey, but all good books are (at least i think) i think some of the periods should have been commas, but otherwise it was goo,d but why not replace tendrils with wisps? sounds more, well, dark, and why not "ebony light" instead of darkness? another dark thingy... im trying to write too, but i have too many books and ive gotten one done, "the fangs of luther" and this sounded a little better... sad thought, but good for you, keep up the good work